Bitter Like The Rain

by Crystal Gaze   Nov 15, 2007


Bitter Like The Rain 2007-11-09
By: Elaine.C.

I stand on a corner, rain falling around me it's music playing upon
the street, but I do not hear it.I'm def to all but the thundering beat
of my heart and your words echo.
I can't feel my toes, I'm completely numb, the pain allied with the cold
and attacked my body. My cheeks are burned red by the torrents of tears
that escaped clouded eyes.
My head hurts, from the screams of my own lament to your heart breaking
words.
"Your Dumped"
How could you have ended something that lasted so long, something strong
and joyous, with such cruel and simple words?
It's because of those bitter words I stand here frozen in memory
as I watch over and over you walk away from me, taking the happiness
but most importantly my heart with you..

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Random Inspiration, as you'll find most my poems are:)
I would just like to say thanks to Marlanna who gave me name suggestions. Thanks Sis<3

Please Vote And Comment.
It's Much Appreciated:P

--Elly.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    This one was better because it was shorter and less noticeable. Nice work

  • 16 years ago

    by kevin Boundy AKA the ghost

    Great emotion and feeling great metaphors (almost to good for random inspiration) lol you did great keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by StormXclusive

    That a really sad poem....hope that feeling has surpass and i hope you get back at least a piece of your heart.

  • Interesting poem. I hope you don't feel this way anymore.

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    Very good poem. I totally loved everything about it. You showed good emotion in this one. Very very sad though. ={ I liked how you started it off and then the "You're Dumped" line was like the "rock" of the poem I should say...Great job.
    Perfect 5/5

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