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by Choose xX Alex Xx Life
Hey there, Just some advice on your poem :D Its really good but i think you could have chosen some of your words better..'I found out that you moved on' could be.. ' You moved on ' 'All this time I was ripped apart I don't know why I don't want to cry' could be ... 'And all this time I was torn. Shread' 'Not even understanding why' 'Forbidding myself from crying.' You see I limited the 'I' and other small words, it helps flow sometimes :D xxx alex xxx