The ending is emotional. it flows well. gr8 job:)

Pretty good. Your emotions flowed clearly. 5/5

Good job on this piece. Funny how we are in such a hurry to turn 18 and take on the world.

There was this freedom
a new dawn had begun.
My world had come.
If only I knew time
had it's own plan.

Love this stanza. Things never turn out the way we have planned. Good job ob this. Makes you stop and think about life.
Take Care Cindy