Oh, this is so depressing. I liked it though, the flow was good and the descriptions worked pretty well. I've started to like writing these type of poems as well and as everyone tells me they are very clichee. Try and use your ideas but not for a self harm poem, there are far too many of them out there. Nice job though. :] 4/5

This poem was strong. The emotions were some I could relate to as I know that a heart ache is the worst pain. The rhyming, structure and flow were great. Well done 5/5

OMG.... I feel this in my heart, I mean down to the core. That one bought tears to my eyes for real. This thing called love hurts so bad. The metaphors work well in the poem. Well done and I thing you should get some of your work published along with your quotes.

I like the repetition in the end :) Anyway It was a good poem, though the flow is kinda choppy in some lines. I have a suggestion to improve this piece. Try to use some punctuations like.. in the first line add some (...) so it forces the reader to wonder what your pain is..

Wow it flows

so sad

Good Job, you got your idea across, but I found the flow to be very jumpy. The ending was well done, because of the repetition.. you make your point strong in doing so. Try to work on flow a bit and you will have a beautiful piece.