When you wake

by damont   Nov 19, 2007


When your eyes open to this world
give me a text or call
so i can see the signature of your mind
and feel the feelings you try to hide
when you wake the blind will be able to see your shine
and the world will be jealous of you and i
we should be a crime
to be able to break the bonds of times
so we can finally be together in a dream worth wild

hey do you think its fine the way it is or should i make it longer?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sarahh

    This is great :)
    i like it 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Thoughtless Consideration

    I think it's good the way it is, poems can be any length you want in order to fully express your emotions. You're a good poet, and I like this poem alot. I think alot of people have had these same feelings you wrote about. Kepp writing, you've got talent.
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