"I can't hold on to myself
I am maddening
I try to make the right moves
I just end up lost within"

These lines hit me the most because I think we all get like that somewhere in our lives.

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What she said, but even more so you went to the heart of the matter. You stated your point and it was explicit and simple. 5/5

A piece of great work wonderfully written
5/5

My mind has now break
this is the only line it the entire poem that just didn't seem to fit somehow, the rest was absoulty vivid and brillant. The flow would have been perfect if not for that, but other wise it was good 4/5