You really do pick out the greatest words and metaphores , makes the reades see the colors ( feel the colors perhaps) . Great imaginary image.

You have so much talent with words and metaphors. You create them together beautifully to come up with something like this. Yet again you have amazed me deeply with another poem written in such great depth to capture the soul whilst reading it. You ended this perfectly! I love the ending it was so unique and different. Your posting poetry more quickly these days i'm having trouble keeping up to read and comment them all. BUT i could never stop they are like a little addiction these days. Well done. An amazing poem. 5/5 ~Mel

This poem was absolute amazing, perfect in every single way and I have nothing bad to say about it. I loved the word choice and the flow, the vocabulary was very strong, but still the poem never got off track. Excellent - Excellent job 5/5 GG23

Such an admirable read. When you write, it is like a breath to a new world of imagination. The way you write reflects the vivid words of your creativity.. Again, I am truly astonished at the depths of the emotions expressed in this poem... The

The way you pieced your words together was so beautiful and flowed so well. this is a really good piece and i like the wya you write.5/5 great job.

So colorful....beautiful....metaphorically awesome write! The images are rich and the whole piece has a sad and hauntiing romantic feel to it....I love the way you've incorporated dreams and universe into the theme....

Always a joy to read your beautiful creations....take care, Debbie

I don't know what I can possibly add after all these descriptive comments to your fantastic poem. But I am definitely blown away by the way you combined the erotic with the phantasmagoric so brilliantly! It compels me to check out more of your poems.

I could truly taste the colors and the passion, what a wonderful splendor, exactly what i needed to read today...emotionally crippling, and yet soothing my head...you excel at
your craft...thank you...
john

Wow that first sentence really captured my attention. You put so much meanging and effort in each line that it really appeals to the reader. Beautiful. After reading each sentence I stopped to savor its beautify..

"Oh, I was lost amongst chocolate-colored, tasteful visions"
^fave line ... flawless imagery. *5/5*

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Anyway here are my thoughts about this piece.

Your writing-Pricelless
atmosphere-captivating
expressed emotions-mixed with outstanding images yet so clear and easy to be admired
first stanza-So powerful first lines, great
second stanza-Beautiful!!!
third stanza- Maybe my favorite one, so so unique and it posses some breath-taking tone of poetic perfectness
fourth stanza- I am bewitched by it's brilliance
ending- WOW, wow! Perfect ending, totally mind-blowing, this is the ending that it is so intense and passionate, it makes superb twist and all about that ending line is wow! The rhythm of poem didn't slow don't too much, no I don't know what to say, really, just perfect ending. Touching too...
choice of words-amazing
flow-I just want to say that I was absolutely lost in this poem and I mean that in excellent way.
imagery- flawlless

All in all this is one of my favorites from you, and it goes in to my favorite poems, I love it! You wrote another masterpiece, I don't have to say anything negative about this piece and I honestly hate in this moment person that dared
to down-vote this fascinating poem.
You should be proud on your self, this is amazing!