Wow...
This is truly powerful, so effective and original. Greatly written poem, filled with so many excellently expressed emotions. I can deeply relate to some parts of this poem.
Fantastic piece, from the beginning to the end.
Keep up!

I mean this in no uncertain terms ... I want your mind! You simply have a way with words that beggars belief.

I thankfully have never been to the place you are describing here, but I have had far too many friends taken, not only to these depths you describe, but far deeper still. It not only becomes a mindset, but a way of life for people living this way.

If you haven't experienced it for yourself (unfortunately I think you have; with your sister maybe?) you can read into it with more than normal comprehension. If you have lived it, you describe it so perfectly it's almost a cry for help.

Simple lines with ~extremely~ powerful words make this a really sharp stab in the side of a life-style that devastates millions.

Wonderfully written .. yet again!

~Pete.