Scrambled thoughts

by cowgirlstar26   Nov 22, 2007


Lets improvise a bit
you'll tremble at my glance
you shall be compelled
you'll understand at last

my anguish subsides
I'm invincible to pain
the longest story, over
to all but me, dismayed

listen to my soul
just a quiet symphony
but if you listen close
it's only in minor key

dismantled, my heart
encompassed in your hands
in this field of innocents
like tiny grains of sand

this escalates further
lets reminisce a while
I gave up everything
but this love is out of style

immortal whispers reside
before the dawn I awake
these tangled thoughts of you
are all left to deteriorate

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    This is one of those love poem which you can't just call "sweet" but it makes you read it twice. original, unusual. nice work:)

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    This was a great poem. and your vocabulary is very advanced. :] i'm very impressed. i wish my vocab was this big. lol. .your words create great images. and this is just an amazing piece of work. :] 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    Love the rhyme in this poem, really effective.

    5/5

    xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is great. The rhyming in most of the parts are good, the choosing of words shows real affection and raw emotions. The flow went smooth all the way threw, and ofcurse, a great ending. Nice work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Another well written poem by you, I enjoyed the story and the flow is done great. I gave you another 5/5 for this.

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