Darkness

by iloveyouandrew   Nov 22, 2007


Wasted away in sighs
Wasted away in the darkness
My darkness just wont go away
All i feel is darkness in me

I never see any light
Just all darkness
Forever in me
All the things you say
Seem to grow and stay with me

Sometimes im glad im stuck in this darkness
Feeling like im not such a waste
The darkness is my friend
Its forever in me

My life is one big blur
One big darkness
I dont feel anything in me anymore
Nothing except Darkness...

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  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Once again a bit extra reptition of the word 'darkness'. Maybe look up other words for it, or exclude it completely.

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Another great poem.....i can feel the emotion in it and thats good...5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    I think that the use of the word darkness was too repetitive.
    The use of it in the last staza was beautiful and it fit. The first stanza it was definitely used to much.
    Maybe it'd be better try to find things that represent darkness so you don't have to say the actual word so many times.
    Otherwise, good content and emotion.
    Well done.
    4/5.

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