Me Against The World (Triolet)

by Jenni Marie   Nov 22, 2007


Broken promises and betrayed oaths all I'm accustomed to
Now finally accepting the fact that I'm always completely alone
Almost every single day feeling out of my depth, lost and blue
Broken promises and betrayed oaths all I'm accustomed to
No longer sure that I'm strong enough to make it through
No more happy thoughts, only woeful ones now roam
Broken promises and betrayed oaths all I'm accustomed to
Now finally accepting the fact that I'm always completely alone

**For A Contest**

Triolet-Consists of 8 lines.
The 1st, 4th and 7th line repeat.
The 2nd and 8th line repeat as well
Rhyme scheme is abaaabab

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  • 17 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    Oh, this was painful. How sad. I think you did a great job with this Triolet. Very nicely written, it flowed so full.

  • 17 years ago

    by Pete

    Considering this is a short structure for a poem I think you display your message within it really nicely. Really strong images and nice use of vocabulary really boost this nicely written piece of poetry.
    As I always say, it's the shorter poems that stay in peoples minds longer as they pack a bigger punch (so to speak), they have to get their point across in so few words.

    It's such a sad piece, really letting the reader into your state of mind.

    Nice work yet again on this one.

    ~Pete.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gizmo

    Smiles because i get to be the first one to comment*

    That is talent.

    i haven't seen one of these poems in ages, actually i doubt i've seen on on this site before, but i tend to not read alot of poetry.

    that poem is absolutely brilliant.
    so keep up the good work

    Amy

    P.s i'll check out some of your other poetry.

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