Smiles because i get to be the first one to comment*

That is talent.

i haven't seen one of these poems in ages, actually i doubt i've seen on on this site before, but i tend to not read alot of poetry.

that poem is absolutely brilliant.
so keep up the good work

Amy

P.s i'll check out some of your other poetry.

Considering this is a short structure for a poem I think you display your message within it really nicely. Really strong images and nice use of vocabulary really boost this nicely written piece of poetry.
As I always say, it's the shorter poems that stay in peoples minds longer as they pack a bigger punch (so to speak), they have to get their point across in so few words.

It's such a sad piece, really letting the reader into your state of mind.

Nice work yet again on this one.

~Pete.

Oh, this was painful. How sad. I think you did a great job with this Triolet. Very nicely written, it flowed so full.