Tragically Fallen Angel

by meganmarie   Nov 22, 2007


She lies alone on the dampened floor
With broken wings
She swears she'll never fly
Her tear drenched dress
Tainted with tragedy

He laughs, the angel of the dark
At her shaken disaster
Laughs at her fears
Her shattered heart

She never should have loved him
Never should have trusted him
Those tears she wished she could drown him in
And a favour she could give to him

And with the end of her frail feather
She cuts a wound deeper than her soul
She marks her worth
Cuts out her heart and hands it to him

He puts her in shackles, ties her down
A captive angel she becomes
With broken wings and not a heart
As he walks away with a smile and another heart

Crying screaming out in pain
Not turning once to say goodbye
She wished he would love
Just one last time
At least turn his head and say goodbye

'Coward' she screams daring to speak
As he turns to her she screams out his name
'I'm sorry!' he screams, tears rolling down his cheeks
And he leaves her there evermore, ceaselessly alone
His tragically fallen angel.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    I really like this.
    It was a very captivating piece and I enjoyed it alot.
    I love how you gave of the impression he is totally evil and he was guiltless
    but then at the end when he says he's sorry he's crying.
    It really added depth.
    You could still revise this to improve the flow..
    You had a few missing words, but thats easily fixed. Like in this stanza..

    'She never should "Have" loved him
    Never "should have"trusted him
    Those tears she wished she could drown him in
    And a favour she could give to him'

    ^It also helps the flow cause it evens out the line lengths.

    'He puts her in shackles, ties her down
    A captive angel she becomes
    With broken wings and not a heart
    As he walks away with a smile and another heart'

    ^ This peice was seeping with sadness.. However the flow is off since you ended two lines with the same word. A little tip it I once was given when I did this alot was "It's easy to rymthe a word with itself.. Get a dictionary and find a better word" lol.
    For this stanza I believe the problem is corrected easily. Try this isnstead...

    'He puts her in shackles, ties her down
    With broken wings and not a heart
    A captive angel she becomes
    As he walks away with a smile and another heart'

    ^ It seperates the same word and helps the flow:)

    'And with the end of her frail feather
    She cuts a wound deeper than her soul
    She marks her worth
    Cuts out her heart and hands it to him'

    ^ This was beautfiul my favourite of all.

    Awesome Job Maggie:D

    5/5 --Elly.

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