Special Someone

by crystaljean88   Nov 23, 2007


Talking online,
For hours on in.
Looking for that special someone,
The search begins.

Browsing Myspace,
Through many pages.
Finally seen someone interesting,
Hopefully I can be his.

After awhile,
We began to talk.
Speaking all the right words,
My heart he unlocked.

Always chatting,
Never seems to end.
I never could wait,
For him to press send.

Sharing feelings,
This should last.
Hopefully soon we share a future,
Not be the past.

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i was thinking bout sum1 i met online awhile ago and I'm really into him. kinda scary i know. but i seem to b falling for him even tho we didn't meet yet. but i decided to try to write a poem about how i feel.. this needs work i think, so its not done yet.. but please leave me sum advice on what i did wrong or what could make it better. thanks

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  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    I loved this one. I actually met one of my ex's online, so I know how it feels. Great job! 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    I really love the title. You're the master of the poem like this. Keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Awwz i rele liike it...it reminded me of sumthing i used to to and feel....another great poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I actually think it is fine as is except the last line is a little off but like you said you need to fix some things so there is my opinion nice poem be careful
    5/5
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    For hours on in.

    I think instead of in you might of ment "end"

    I found this poem to be quite sweet to tell you the truth. Your word choice is simple but effective and created an almost chant like flow while I was reading it. The topic is interesting because many people do fall for people online, I'm sure many could relate to this. The emotion I could feel was quite vivid and created a loving feel over the atmosphere. A warm piece which was well written. Good effort. ~Mel

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