How Long Will They Mourn Me?

This actually made me smile. I have no idea why, but it did. I liked that the questioning of what will happen after you pass was not overbearing in a ohmygosh stop saying that type of way. Lol.

Your flow was not off at all and I did not think that it seemed forced either. I got a natural feeling witht this peice, which is great. One thing, in the last line it says "how long will they mourn me" I think that maybe it would sound better mourn for me. I could be totally wrong. Lol. Just one thing. Other than that, great job.
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Amber..

This is exactly what I was expecting from this title, I guess there isn't really a tangent to be taken with a title such as this.
I think just about everyone wonders these same things (well, adults of course) .. will I be missed? Will I have anyone to miss me? What kind of legacy do I leave behind? and so on.
I think you put it into words very nicely.

I would have liked this piece to be a little longer, it asks the questions but doesn't really go into your own thoughts behind why you think this way.

It is a really good entry, which I would have liked to see more of.

~Pete.

I think many people ponder these thoughts and of course, we won't know. Nicely written with a great flow. I love how you are writing about all sorts of topics.
Nice job.

Funny.....I've wondered some of the exact same things....I think this piece is one many can relate to....

Nice poem written with a good flow and excellent rhyming....very thought provoking...

"I'm not depressed, nor do I want to die
It's just that sometimes I wonder, you see
Obviously I wouldn't know the answers
Yet I question...how long will they mourn me?"

I think we all wonder who will miss us when we're gone....will they remember us with kindness...and just what sort of legacy if any we leave behind us....You've written this all very well....enjoyed it!

Take care, Debbie