Comments : Untouchable

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I love this piece! It is truly deep and greatly written, with flawless flow and great rhymes. I can relate to it in a way. I like the ending, it's so positive and inspirational. You portrayed truly great message through this piece.
    Keep up!

    P.s- Thanks for the dance :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    Definitely an inspirational write and a little different than your normal style. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.

  • 17 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Wow excellent....it held so much power and emotion for a contest poem it was perfect. I enjoyed the little inspirational twist at the end of the slightly gloomy poetic piece...very nice

    P.S. Thanks for the Dance

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    To start with I really like the style of this piece, I think it really makes the poem swing along from one line to the next effortlessly. Solid and sturdy rhyme scheme right from the start; never sounding forced or familiar.

    I think the topic is a really good one to write about, it's not often you read a poem with such a meaning. As youngsters, we forever seem to be teased and tormented by cruel kids and bullies. One day we finally wake up and realise that there is nothing wrong with us, it's rather something wrong with the ones doing the insulting. Really nice message to put out.

    A really solid entry into this contest.
    Thoroughly enjoyed every syllable.

    ~Pete.