The last stanza was one I very much liked and it was inspirational 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Ayan pare sapilitan itong pag- comment koh sau wahaha sama p ng loob q nitoh ha? joke lng.. ok here it goes i can feel the lightness of it (gets moh ba ibig q sabihin?hehe) what i mean is u don't have to dig deeper just to comprehend the meaning of it.. it was an inspiring piece. and this poem deserved to be read by everyone who seems hopeless.

I can relate to this poem. I love the story and I guess it's also well written by you. No criticize from me!!! Wonderful poem, it's 5/5!!!

I can relate to this poem. I love the story and I guess it's also well written by you. No criticize from me!!! Wonderful poem. It's another 5/5

Beautiful work here. The message from this poem is inspirational to all and so very true. The imagery you created with your words was flawless and I truly enjoyed this piece. Well done *5/5*

A very captivating first stanza. The imagery just poured out so perfectly. I like the fact that in every line, you described something that related to the sky, which relates back to your topic. If you kept your head down, you would never be able to see those things. Very clever.

The other two verses that followed flowed very well into a body and outro. Although I was expecting more, the contents of this poem were great.

Omg!
this poem is exceptional!
i absolutely loved the way how you conveyed the message, with drawing beautiful pictures. 1st stanza is captivating, and the image of heaven you use (clouds, moon, sun) creates such a blissful and at the same time solemn atmosphere
there is a lot of talent in your poem. it's not just about drawing beautiful and captivating pictures but about making readers feel this atmosphere and making them think. and you really made me think about what is happiness and am i and people around me happy and many other things.

5/5 without doubt.

Very inspirational and your message is one that all should listen to. Each line was entrancing and the way you worded each and every word gave the reader a feeling of everything. A truly wonderful piece, so true. I enjoy reading your work, 5/5 from me. Take care...