Comments : Backfire

  • 16 years ago

    by Common Sense

    I'll bey your satisfied
    bet*

    Its almost humorous
    It's*

    You don't eve know it
    even*

    Theres no escaping now
    There's*

    Its quite a simple plan
    It's*

    PROOFREAD.
    And I also suggest that heart breakers (in the last stanza) become one word for better flow.
    I think you should break up the lines further or in different places, because it doesn't flow very well in a lot of lines ... but it tells a good story c8 NICE!