Place to be free
I would suggest changing the line to:
'A place to be free'
Because it's the opening line and deserves to be more of a powerful statement.

Its not real anymore
It's*

I'm not looking for these mistakes, they're all just what I find when I'm reading them normally 8| I like these shorter poems, because you're good at making a point with so few words.

LOL The first letter of each thing spells out PMS
Place
Meliting
Set
... Hahaha, was that intentional? xD