Make me

by Caroline   Nov 25, 2007


Make me forget
about every lie
about all the pain
about wanting to die

make me regret
telling you i love you
telling you i would do anything
telling you it was all true

make me wish
that she was dead
that i ran away
that you picked me instead

make me die
so everything could fade
so i wont make another mistake
so i wont be afraid

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  • 16 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    It's amazing how heartbreak is by far the greatest pain any of us will ever feel, but to look at somebody with a broken heart you'd never know they were dying inside. Great work 5/5 GG23

  • 16 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Hm, I like this one. The rhymes are simple, and the meter is a bit wacky[that's an awesome word, isn't it?], but the idea is there. I like the, "make me," you used. It's really, challenging, pleading, expressive, and simple. Very nice.

    I'd suggest trying out some things like... hmm... metaphors, personification, similies?

    Or, actually, something which might be really nice in this poem would be alliteration and assonance, they'd really make the words pop out, I think.
    All the same. Nice effort, it was cute.

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