by Narphangu
Hm, I like this one. The rhymes are simple, and the meter is a bit wacky[that's an awesome word, isn't it?], but the idea is there. I like the, "make me," you used. It's really, challenging, pleading, expressive, and simple. Very nice. |
It's amazing how heartbreak is by far the greatest pain any of us will ever feel, but to look at somebody with a broken heart you'd never know they were dying inside. Great work 5/5 GG23 |