One Perfect Day

by Brittany   Nov 25, 2007


Who cares what they gave us,
When it's taken away without a doubt,
But they didn't take it did they?
It's all I can think about.

So much for the future,
When we'll always be here in the past,
So much for perfect stories,
When we couldn't even make it last.

There's nothing left here for us,
When we let it all just get away,
Never thought it would come to this,
But there's nothing left for me to say.

So who cares where we go now,
Because it's over and we had our fun,
Say goodbye to that one perfect day,
Say goodbye to me 'cause now we're done.

--EDIT: I sort of put it into song mode and added--

Who cares what they gave us,
When it's taken away without a doubt,
But they didn't take it did they?
It's all I can think about.

Who knew we'd ever do this,
Even if we thought that it felt right,
I can't say it's been forgotten,
I still feel you holding,
Me tight.

Cry here on my shoulder,
Now, now.
It's all I can do for you,
Now, now.
Cry here on my shoulder,
Now, now.
Try to be much stronger,
Now.

So much for the future,
When we'll always be here in the past,
So much for perfect stories,
When we couldn't even make it last.

Let's pretend for just one moment,
That it wasn't just a bunch of lies,
All we're ever going to know,
Is that it has ended,
With goodbye.

Cry here on my shoulder,
Now, now.
It's all I can do for you,
Now, now.
Cry here on my shoulder,
Now, now.
Try to be much stronger,
Now.

There's nothing left here for us,
When we let it all just get away,
Never thought it would come to this,
But there's nothing left for me to say.

So who cares where we go now,
Because it's over and we had our fun,
Say goodbye to that one perfect day,
Say goodbye to me 'cause
Now we're done.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    Very well written. loved the emotion you showed.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    I really like the edited version, the original was good but the second seemed more finished. The last stanza was definitely my favourite, it summarised the poem perfectly:

    "So who cares where we go now,
    Because it's over and we had our fun,
    Say goodbye to that one perfect day,
    Say goodbye to me 'cause
    Now we're done."

    5/5

    Em xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    I really like this poem!
    Great Job!
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Caroline

    I loved it. i liked the flow and the emotion in it. amazing, and well written.
    5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    I found the diction quite simple, but the whole poem, I just felt myself getting pulled in. Though I felt there could've been more imagery and metaphors/similes, it was truly a delightful read. The edit, it had me trying to sing it in my head. The first few stanzas, I find, though a cliche subject, you portrayed the idea well without coming straight out and saying what it's all about. Great read.
    Nicely done, dear .
    ..__MiNDYY