Awww.. this was pretty good! i liked it, it had a sweet message to it. Some of the rhyming kinda seemed outta place, but then some of it was really good and fit. great work! so keep it up! :D

A nice poem with sincere meaning and written with good emotion; however, the rhyme scheme at the end was a little off...I'm not sure how you meant that. Anyways I see a lot of potential. Keep writing!