First Kiss Feelin'

by Fabz   Nov 26, 2007


That first kiss is one thing you'll always remember,
Feeling that passion you'll remember forever,
Makes you heart drop like heavy wet weather,
Makes you heart stop,
Then fills you with life,
Fills you up with that nice feeling inside,

That first kiss shows if someone truly cares,
That first kiss shows if they truly there,
The excitement of connecting lips ta lips,
The shiver u get all the way down ta ya hips,
The shiver u get that makes your heart dip,

Being that close is a beautiful thing,
But finding that could be the most difficult thing,
So when it's discovered, cherish that feeling,
Cause any heartache you had,
Will fade away with that magical healing,

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  • 16 years ago

    by rdn 11 2 08

    I luv it!!!!!!!!!!! dont let nobody, including that Krystal girl, get you down......... it's the real u, so keep with that flow.

    *dawn*
    11.2.08

  • 16 years ago

    by Whisper

    I absolutely LOVE how you used the rhyme scheme. Personally, I didn't think it seemed forced at all. I feel completely in love with the poem after the first couple of lines.

    Then I fell in love with the meaning behind it and the true-ness (if thats a word...) of that meaning.

    Everyone has a first kiss. You can't have a second without a first. And if its with the right person, it can be so magical.

    Not only is this about a first kiss EVER, but it could be about a first kiss with your new boyfriend/girlfriend. which is good, because it means there is some versatility.

    soo well done. very nice =)

  • 16 years ago

    by LiveForHim

    Ahhh! I LOVE this poem!! I added it to my Favs. Keep it up, i love how this one flows... ;]

  • 16 years ago

    by Fabz

    Thanks everyone for they comment!!

    Krystal- ill bare that in mind! I no i can do better, I feel am getting better with each one!! thanks again

  • 16 years ago

    by Krystal

    To me it seemed like the rhyme was pushed. You should try a no-rhyme. The flow might come easier. But I liked your words, and the whole First Kiss thing. It's a good poem, but I'm sure you could make it better.
    Keep writing good stuff.
    Krystal.

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