This poem is very interesting in a good way. It was very powerful. It made me feel a few different things. Fantastic job!

I agree with Kaylee.
you did an amazing job.
it should be in a sadness, depression area also more then love.
you know what i mean yeah you love this person to death but they are ripping you apart and talking about death the most but
id doesnt really matter i guess this was really an amazing job :]

keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

This was okay. But I do suppose it could be better. You repeated a lot; when there was no need for it. Which, I didn't particularly care for. Also, it could of flown a bit better.

But, it was still pretty good :]