Nicely writen. 5/5 :]
-Jack

Oh my I just lovved this. The story you told was filled with love and tragic. The emotions were easy to relate with and it all flowed flawlessly. Well done *5/5*

Amazing!
I really like how you mixed beautiful with tragic. this was really well written,and I can't think of anything for you too improve.

A good read,
keep it up,
--Elly.

Wow that is rele sad but VERY VERY good writing....muy bien!!!(very good in spanish lol) 5/5

Wow...Even though it was short and simple it was so big and moving. I loved it you really have a special talent use it to your best ability! you did a wonderful job with this poem
5/5
Kaila

Oh how sad, but very well writtin.

This is simply great, I love the way you express your emotion especially in the third stanza. Another well done job!!! 5/5 for sure!!!

Deep and emotional poem. The flow was excellent! The word choice was good and the concept was beautiful. Great write... 5/5

What a tragic romance fell in love only for things to sour, im sorry about this. The poem itself was quite good allthough i think you trid really hard with the ryhming but it did work. the flow was good and consistant . This part of th poem was especialy good

if only he knew
that this wouldn't last
and before he knew
love slipped through his grasp

so all in all a good job 5/5
take care