by KJ Nov 27, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Hiding behind my smiles |
by Hidden1
Dang, that was DEEEPPPPP!!!! I really like this a whole lot and it's a very true poem. I can agree on all levels of this. My only question is what do you do when you are ready to come out of hiding and will we ever be the same. Awesome job, you should write a book. |
by HidinVictim
This is so true, and touching... you can really feel the internal struggle, i really enjoyed this... 5/5 |
by Blissful
I loved the emotions and the power in each line. The mood was deep and haunting. There were some mistakes here and there but other then that it was great. Well done *5/5* |
Wow, this poem was just great. I love the feeling from this and the flow fit just perfect. Except, in the second stanza, I think you had a mistake. In this line: |
I like the structure you used, it fit the poem really well. I also like the repitition and how you made it rhyme without sounding forced. I didn't like the last line of each stanza, it didnt fit the flow right (unless you used a structure that required it) and I'd suggest making some minor changes. Other than that, I really liked it. Nice work. :) |