I love this! It is short yet endlessly effective and original, I've never read something like this. Truly effective poem, I like the imagery that you created and dark atmosphere in the piece.
Breathtaking poem!

Wow that was a good poem. i liked it. good job.

Angela, welcome to our club, I was blown away by the words used here, a fantastic title and words to match, you are definitely gifted, I cannot wait to read more. Timothy r

This is really really cool, it's different. I love it :) I would try and see if you can find a better word other than "bloody" cause it would make this piece alot stronger :)
5.5