Comments : Christmas Time

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    This is the best of the three, my darling.
    I believe that you just had more . . . rhythm with this poem.
    Like, it didn't seemed force and it was described well.
    There were a few parts that might need worked on, bu toverall you did wonderfully with this. (:

  • 17 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This poem was a really enjoyable read. i can sence the happiness through the whole poem. and evertything worked together very well in this poem. keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked this one! Christmas time is my absolute favorite time of the year so I can totally relate! there were only a few rocky spots like:
    like stanza 3 line 1
    otherwise wonderful job...
    5/5 =]
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    I would rework this one too. The point of the poem is good, the flow is weak. But like i said before every one has their own stile.

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I like the premise behind the poem, but the flow was a little off for me, a little change here and there to tighten up your lines would help, it was a nice read though, good job and thanks so much for entering it.

  • 16 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    I LOVED THIS ONE MRS. LOPEZ!