A very sad piece of a poet
a perfect emotions and thoughts
a great well expressed and
a powerful message

5/5

Awwww this poem is so cute and sad
the emotion was good and i got a picture in my head so great imagery

5/5

This poem, i find it really sad and you brought up the gloomy ambiance nicely. honestly, the flow is almost nice and smooth but on the last two lines i find it confusing.. who utter these lines "I'll love you forever and always
as a tear falls one last time tonight" is it the girl or is it the guy?.. but over all yeah it's cute. just try to manage and clarify those last two lines and it will look more beautiful. =)

This is absolutely adorable, i really like it. It's really cute and I think you should keep it up. It's beautifully written.

Wow that was really beautiful - i love the last line. and the metaphore (or simile?) of the little girl was so touching :*)

Wow that was really beautiful - i love the last line. and the metaphore (or simile?) of the little girl was so touching :*)

Sad. but cute.
another great write. :]
5/5.

Awwwwww, tyhis definietly was very cute, i loved the last line of the poem, its the boy talking to the girl right? well any how i loved it, your an amzing writer, well deserved 5/5

Stephanie Naylor

Another unexpected one. I loved the part:
"she yells out loud in the blankness
it echos back as rumors and lies"
The word choice is excellent. I loved this poem! ^.^

Nice imagery
i loved this poem
it spoke to me
because I can relate
somewhat
this was excellent
better then some of your latest
5/5
kaila

Oh my this has to be my fave from all the ones I read! It was so heartbreakingly sad where I could see myself in your words. Your use of descritpions and details truly brought the poem to life for me. Well done *5/5*

Oh now thats what i called talent. IMAGERY- absoloutey spot on, great adjectives, great lanuage skills, the image of the little girl and boy, is dark, eerry and sad all at the one time, so you got the emotional bit into the poem too.

she yells out loud in the blankness
it echos back as rumors and lies- thats one strong line, right there and how true it is, it reminds me of something a friend of mine said a very long time ago. thats no matter what she says, no matter what she screams into her pillow all alone, it comes back as decite and lies.

Wow...you write with such strong and clear emotions. This poem really touched my heart. There are so many great things about this poem that make it so beauiful. Very nice work my friend. Nik