A very powerfull write.Life has its struggles and its ups and downs ,but these things are sent to try and if you can get through it you'll be a stronger person,just gotta believe there is light at the end of the tunnel.

....I LOVE this.

I don't even know what I could say that would give justice to how much I love this piece, and seeing as I'm not usually a fan of suicide or any reference to suicide, that's saying something.

Okay, here goes.

1st stanza: Beautiful opening. Very saddening and moving, and beautiful imagery portrayed from the first line.

2nd stanza: I thought the flow seemed a little shaky here.

maybe try:

"Such a waste of time
embarrassment to all
sand hourglass of life
about to cease to fall"

It just flows better that way, for me.

3rd and 4th stanza: Incredible. Just incredible. I love the matter of fact way you talked about tying up loose ends, the way the words carried the "just don't give a ****" anymore message.

5th stanza: Your flow seemed to waver in this stanza, as well. Maybe something along the lines of:

"On the battered bedside table
pill bottles sturdily stand
two birds in the bush
are better than one in hand"

Get rid of the two "the's" as I did. They are just fillers really in this stanza, and I don't think you need them there.

Stanza 6 and 7: These remind me of stanza three and four, and the giving up and not giving a damn again. It adds for a powerful affect on the overall piece that you have repeated these feelings without saying the same words again and making the poem end up cliche towards the end.

Ending stanza: My favourite of the entire poem.

"I'd follow these perfect steps
if I only had the guts. "

^^Those lines are amazing, Again something that many people will relate to, I know I can as I used to feel that way a long time ago, and the end is so in your face and hard hitting that it hits the reader like a slap in the face.

So many suicide/self harm poems end up cliche and a waste of time, but this dear...this is one of the few that are worth reading.

Great poem, sad dark deep and filled with pain though, but flow was great. Loved it