Industrial Ailment

"Ugly wheeled animals
busy metal bees"

^^ I adore those opening lines. despite being relatively short, I found that opening to be filled with wonderful imagery and it interested me right away.

"in a perpetual race
toward tainted destinies"

^^How I LOVE those two lines...those lines are perfect in every way. I love the tainted destinies, very powerful and intense.

Second stanza:
Well I'm not sure what juggernauts are, nevertheless the imagery you portrayed in this stanza was beautifully vivid and created stunning visuals for me as the reader.

"tails pumping fumes
perfume fills the skies"

^^ That was just beautiful, so intense and vivid, and I adore the ending line in this sky, it created pretty pictures for me. Definietly my favourite stanza so far.

Last stanza:
What can I say? It was amazing, the perfect way to end this write, hard hitting and intense and a wonderful way to wrap up the piece.

Your flow in this is fantastic! It didn't falter once, while the vocab you used added for a powerful effect on the overall piece.

I usually find nature poems somewhat difficult to pull of, but here you've managed to make this piece look so effortless and easy.

Beautiful write.