The Hell Within My Heaven.

by Crystal Gaze   Dec 13, 2007


The Hell Within My Heaven.
By:Elaine.C.

Honey blond curling down her back,
as thick lashes cover crystal eyes.
An oval face delicately boned,
with high cheek bone's and full ruby lips.

Athletically built,
with muscled thigh's,
and defined arm's,
to me she was Perfect.

But her smile was a disguise,
her laughter forced.
She wasn't perfect,
she was dieing inside.

Her nights were filled with tears,
for those long lonely years
now her fear grows within the dark
as she lives with a shattered heart.

But no longer does she breath,
her mind screams her fears
She can't keep wilting away
she needs to stay

The days get harder as the pass,
her life fails, she will not last..
but I take her within my arms,
and shelter her from the harm..

I whisper softly in her ear,
telling her of my own tears.
And as she sobs uncontrollably,
I hold her were she should be for all eternity

I tell her just how much i love her
and that I will always be there
so that she will never fail,
I won't let her heart tear.

'It's' the hell,within my heaven,
and it's a tragic tale
but it pages are being turned
and the daemons are being burned

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  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I jus adored the imagery you created here with you words. It all just flowed flawlessly and connect together naturally. The story you told was unique and interesting to read. I loved the title because it captured my attention and made me want to read more. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Love Love Loved the title!
    Your really good at getting catchy titles
    that's why I chose to read this poem
    was because of the title
    and I'm glad I did
    this poem was relatable to a lot of my own pieces
    I thought it was beautiful
    5/5
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by StormXclusive

    The poem has a nice flow...it is really sad in some aspect because that girl sure sounds like me.

  • 16 years ago

    by KJ

    'It's' the hell,within my heaven,
    and it's a tragic tale
    but it pages are being turned
    and the daemons are being burned"

    I loved that stanza the best =}
    Beautifully written work. I loved everything about it starting with your usage of vocabulary to the flow. You also used good imagery. Perfect =}
    5/5

    PaSsIoNaTe kIsSeS

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    A lovlely and peaceful poem.. it flowed gracefully sweet. i liked how u described the girl who have secret burden inside and how u ended up the poem.. the ending is sweet. keep up the good writings. =)

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