This poem is so sweet.And you said you couldnt ryhme!They wern't horrible.The main idea of the poem was adorable! Great job yet again.
Keep writing,
Rado

Wow... another breath-taking poem, Elaine. This poem is an example of others that gives you a serious wake up call. Just because someone seems so perfect, doesn't mean that they are. That also doesn't mean that they're not dying and lonely on the inside, speading all night crying.. this was very beautiful Elaine. Don't change a thing about it! 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Nice flow sweet and spicy at the same time i think it was a wonderful poem by a great poet

~shattered Dreams~

A lovlely and peaceful poem.. it flowed gracefully sweet. i liked how u described the girl who have secret burden inside and how u ended up the poem.. the ending is sweet. keep up the good writings. =)

'It's' the hell,within my heaven,
and it's a tragic tale
but it pages are being turned
and the daemons are being burned"

I loved that stanza the best =}
Beautifully written work. I loved everything about it starting with your usage of vocabulary to the flow. You also used good imagery. Perfect =}
5/5

PaSsIoNaTe kIsSeS

The poem has a nice flow...it is really sad in some aspect because that girl sure sounds like me.

Love Love Loved the title!
Your really good at getting catchy titles
that's why I chose to read this poem
was because of the title
and I'm glad I did
this poem was relatable to a lot of my own pieces
I thought it was beautiful
5/5
kaila

I jus adored the imagery you created here with you words. It all just flowed flawlessly and connect together naturally. The story you told was unique and interesting to read. I loved the title because it captured my attention and made me want to read more. Well done *5/5*