Your earthy smell, like crystal water
the ripple that's my heart gets hotter
my skin aflame, with memories
cooled off by the shade of forgiving trees.

ur that's in the second line...i think would b better if u changed it to "as"

but thats just my opinion...u dont gotta take it just a suggestion...but yeah...well its a good poem either way 5/5

Oh wow this was powerful and well writen, i really like this alot. Very emotional but it got to the point and a twist at the end becasue honestly i thought it would be another dying love story but it wasnt it was because that person was really never there. amazing. :]

keep up the good work. keep on writing.
love always and forever.

Love the imagery dear.

:]

5/5

This is really good, keep writing, and i'll keep reading... please look at some of my stuff and tell me what you think.

Very well written paints a beautiful picture in the mind keep up the good work 5/5

Another great poem of yours... It's so beautifully written.. 5/5