I thought it ended abruptly,e h.
But, it was a good poem with great word choice. (:You surely have talent, my darling. Each line had just the right emotional boundary and syllable count.

But, I must say - there's something missing. I think you could add to it, maybe? I don't know, but it's missing something, darling.

Surely not emotion or a flawless flow. (:

4/5

A good poem i now what you were trying to say

Good poem.. it had alot of description and i think thats the best way to write a poem. be very detailed. loved it. 5/5