Awesome,
the images
rock
like water
and music
that rolls.

And the flashing lips brilliantly stabbed me!

Wow... this is absolutely brilliant! Whole poem is endlessly vivid and filled with effective, overwhelming inner beauty. I love it! You created amazing imagery and this piece is truly original from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:

-Marines fight
And cares are tossed
Blue fairy dust
On breeze
Glittering sand-
^^
so beautiful.

Ending is great and very effective.
Keep up!