Wow, i really liked this poem,
a nicely written great poem.
a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

Honestly?
I believe this is your best poem so far,
There's format,
And it doesn't seem as forced.

Suggestion:
Try to find your point and make it.
Write/type everything beforehand, don't make it rhyme.
Just write down what you have in mind.

Read it, then write a poem about it.

Your poems seems pretty cliche.
But like I said.
I believe this is your best.

Sorry if you took it personaly.
I have nothing against you or your poetry.

Think of me as someone narrow-minded :[