My last thoughts were of you

by Dan Ryan   Dec 15, 2007


The darkness threatens to pull me under an excess of shadows
And hide me from the light
It's purpose is to make me forget
So that it might steal you from my mind tonight

Away from the memory of your touch
And into a different kind of embrace
Where I've never felt any further away
From knowing the beauty of your face

My unconscious mind is smitten
With memories of your smile
Its poison in my veins now
And I don't mind letting it spread for awhile

My dreams help me realize
What I think I knew from the start
That my purpose for being
Is to be consumed within the facets of your heart

There are only bright images of you looking back at me
Laughing at some of my immaturity
Your eyes show a certain understanding
But I can't thank you for this security

My last thoughts were of you
As faded and uncertain as they may be
They don't always have a story
But sometimes they add up to a dream

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  • 16 years ago

    by MissMeg

    Wow that was such a wonderful poem, i really enjoyed it. You have some talent. Keep it up. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Wow! That was....wow! I don't even know what to say. It was truly beautiful though. I mean the talent you have for capturing your reader is incredible. At first you were on my favs because of who you are to Jess, but now you're there b/c I LOVE your work. Great job.
    ~Jules

  • 16 years ago

    by Dan Ryan

    I liked this one, I just wrote it about falling asleep or trying to thinking about someone. At first you cant sleep because of them, and then when you do you dream about them, and sometimes its strange where your unconcious thoughts will take you...

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    And just what did you want to change about this? This is by far my favorite piece you've written. The only thing I can suggest is working on the flow...watching your syllable count a little more. But the wording and everything is amazing. I'm not just saying that...i really enjoyed it. The third stanza is by far my favorite but the last one had a nice twist to it too. It's really hard to pick a fav. part. This is such a great poem! I thought I'd have something to critique, but it's great.
    *ME* :)

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