And just what did you want to change about this? This is by far my favorite piece you've written. The only thing I can suggest is working on the flow...watching your syllable count a little more. But the wording and everything is amazing. I'm not just saying that...i really enjoyed it. The third stanza is by far my favorite but the last one had a nice twist to it too. It's really hard to pick a fav. part. This is such a great poem! I thought I'd have something to critique, but it's great.
*ME* :)

I liked this one, I just wrote it about falling asleep or trying to thinking about someone. At first you cant sleep because of them, and then when you do you dream about them, and sometimes its strange where your unconcious thoughts will take you...

Wow! That was....wow! I don't even know what to say. It was truly beautiful though. I mean the talent you have for capturing your reader is incredible. At first you were on my favs because of who you are to Jess, but now you're there b/c I LOVE your work. Great job.
~Jules

Wow that was such a wonderful poem, i really enjoyed it. You have some talent. Keep it up. 5/5