Comments : Cheaters.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Powerful and excellently written piece, I like it from the beginning to the end. Very original and creative. I love descriptive tone of this and the imagery that you created.
    My favorite lines are:

    -Turn me over - for I've been naughty this season,
    chanting such devilish rhymes of some odd sort:-

    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    This is good its very true about cheaters you are a very talented poet good job! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This is such a powerful piece you have created. I love the 2 lines stanzas, with longs lines they were descriptive and really painted vivid imagery into my mind.

    Swallow me whole with those fire red lips of yours,
    covered in lipstick and coated in glitter galore.

    Them two lines really stood out to me, the word choice made it easy for me to picture what you were portraying within my mind.

    Turn me over - for I've been naughty this season,
    chanting such devilish rhymes of some odd sort:

    I also loved them two lines because they created such bitter sweet sarcasm into your poem.

    This was unique to me I felt like your twist at the end really opened the poem up giving a nice finishing touch. When I read the title I was persuming it would be a tiny touch cliche but I should of known better coming from you.

    Well done. Truely amazing. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This poem i think was a lil to short, if u made it longer this could b a rlly good poem