Another great poem....5/5

OH WHAT A SAD PIECE

i mostly liked the last line

fooling both life and death

keep it up

good luck

Her Guardian

Yea i really liked this one. The emotion, the imagery, the vocabulary. Everything about it was great. Perfect 5/5

PaSsIoNaTe KiSsEs

This is deeply touching, filled with excellently expressed emotions. Sadness is overwhelming in the whole piece, along with truly vivid and greatly created imagery. I can relate to this in a way.
I like your descriptions, they're effective and they create very intense atmosphere.
My favorite stanza is:

-Colored dreams, turning black and white
Looking behind, beach still shimmers in front of my gray eyes.
Listening to your heart, the redness of it glows.
The breath of colorful skies ends with a choke.-

Keep up!
5/5 from me

An amazing write.
it was deep and so full of emotion.
i like it. :] 5/5.

Its sounds really sad... filled w/ emotions and very motivating.. it really touches my heart and im sure some readers too.. it has really words that was expresses very well.. and i can relate at the same time.. nice flow 5/5