Good bye my love

by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX   Dec 15, 2007


Tears are falling on my pillow.
As i look in the window all i can
hear is death calling me now.
I always said i wouldn't trust again.
I swear i didn't see it coming.Everyone says
bear with it its all gonna be okay.
So i fake a smile .Yet no one
No's I'm still in denial.Everyday
i think of sliting my wrist.If suicides
not worth it why does it feel so right.

So maybe i could ease the pain
tonight and cut the little vain keeping
me here.You all say you would miss
me so.But it seems like everyone must
go.Everyday i try to move on but
your so thought consuming.i don't know
what to do to make you go away.So maybe
tonight ill slide the blade across my skin
And this will all go away.

Please dont hate me i really wanted to
stay but theres nothing to do to make this
pain go away.I don't understand why you
hurt me i only loved you with my heart.
I don't think you even care so don't
worry yourself with my problems
cause very soon i wont exist.

So I'm saying goodbye to you
and to the love i thought i knew

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Oh forgot to say i rated in 4/5 coz now it's good but i feel you can improve it. just my opinion)

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Heeey the meaning is so sharp and heart-felt and the words you use are perfect. very emotionally
    but i think you can now work on it a bit to make it more rhymed but save the meaning
    it'll be excellent if you do. :)

    And by the way nice idea to end a sentence in the midddle of a line.

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Another really good poem, but like the one before, the structure makes the poem look bad. Also, try writing the whole word, like youi wrote "No's" should be spelled the right way: "knows." It's just a suggestion. Good job thought!

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    A very sad write. but amazing. the flow was good and your choice of words were very alluring. This piece really caught my attention from start to finish. :] I can feel the emotion you let off of the poem . amazing write. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by TheRapture03

    This is really good. its really sad too. I can feel the emotion flow from it. good job. 5/5

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