Comments : Dark roads of the mind

  • 17 years ago

    by ari

    This is a really good poem.
    the rhyme scheme helps the flow, and the subject is rather dark but engaging.
    good job : )
    and thank you for the comment.

  • 17 years ago

    by FountainsOfBlood

    Totally agree with Ari. Nothing much i can add to that :)
    well done! 5/5 :D

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Wow for one of your first poems this is amazing! keep up the good work!

    Cayce

  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Good starting... and i guess u can do it more better for ur next poem if ever! just keep it up and continue writing... great job of urs 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Solus

    See....I told you it was good. Now do not fear, write from within and more praise is sure to follow.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brandon Lee

    Thats freakin awesome!
    You have a nice flow, unbroken in your rhythm. *5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    That's interesting. Short but definitely fits its length. Nice flow up til the end. I don't know about that last line. In a way it seems...a little off. But still it fits. Hmm I'll ignore that. Dark which suits this piece. I liked the content and how it plays together nicely.
    ~Faith-less

  • 16 years ago

    by Skyfire

    "Relentless and cold it plays on his fears.
    Day after day it schemes and it lies."

    I really liked these lines. Well done--short, but still very emotional.