That's really good Wes, but not all poetry has to rhyme, in some lines it sounds like you're just struggling to get a rhyme in.

I think it would flow better if it didn't rhyme, but that's my personal opinion, 'tis your poem =)

Beautiful though, 5/5

P.s You won't hear from me for a while, I'm off to England with school. I come back thursday!

It was okay, but was it really from your heart? and im not trying to drive you crazy or anything but i dont belive u really ment it. and i agree with beth, it doesnt have to rhyme.

This was such a touching and romantic poem. The title itself made me want to read more. When I did, I was not disappointed. It describes such an amazing love. 5/5

Beautiful. such a sweet imaginery; the poem is so tender, full of love.
in this poem you connect the reality with "castles in the sky".
i mean 1st stanza is abt sky and this picture seems to be like a dream,
then you go to "midsummers day" and "starlit midnight" that are more real but still very abstract;
then you talk about your heart and your love that are real;
and in the last stanza you write about a poem that we all see so it's the most real thing for readers.
it's a nice strucure to make a reader feel what you feel.
of course the wording is great.

awwww i can't help saying the most banal phrase ever "awwww this is so sweet" lol

ok and i hope this connection between sky castles=dreams and reality meand that your dreams have came into reality.
5/5