Farewell, My Darling...

The house feels so empty without you
Everything seems so out of place
[The house feels so empty without you
everything's so out of place]
- For some odd reason I wasn't fond with the usage of "seems" I think that it didn't connect well with the word "feel". Maybe because of the double -e? It's just my opinion, though.

You were always there to lean upon
To cuddle up to
Always so warm and inviting
[You were always there to lean upon,
to cuddle up to, so warm and inviting]
- The second line seemed a bit too short and the next line used 'always' again. And, it messed with the flow for me.

Never complained when I was angry
And threw things at you
- I liked these lines. They make the poem original. I don't think I've ever read a poem where people apologized for throwing things at someone else. I'm sure they're out there, but I like the idea of it. Makes it a bit more direct. And, I like when people make poems direct, as long as they're not over doing it.

You were always there with open arms
You looked proud and touch
[You were always there with open arms
You looked proud and touchED]
- I'm guessing you mean 'touched'. I'm not quite sure, but that's what I'm assuming by the lines before and after.

You were fading away, became so pale
[You were fading away, becoming so pale]
OR
[You were fading away, you became so pale.]

Hahaha. I honestly did NOT expect the ending. I didn't even realize that it was under funny poems, which is odd because there's bright yellowing surrounding the loss of something. Fifteen years is a LONG time for a couch, I've seen them last 9 or 10 but not 15. You must take excellent care of your things. Which is good! (:

Cute poem, Gem. Really cute.

Great entrance~

The house feels so empty without you
Everything seems so out of place
You were always there to lean upon

It's climatic. Nice poem, 5/5. Keep on writting.

You know what...I know this is a funny piece but it's something that is REALLY sad HAHAHA My family had these couches for a very long time and when it was time to get rid of them everyone was a little broken up about it.
NICE!!!!

I have to admit you got me! I`m sitting here thinking "OH NO" her and the guy in the picture broke up and they seemed so perfect......Great job,perfect ending.

Hehehe... great poem... at first I was like oh no she's leaving him... and then its a sofa and I laughed sooo hard... lol