by Jenni Marie
Pete..what can i say that would even begin to describe how i feel about this piece? i LOVE this. the imagery you portray in this piece is amazing, it created vivid visuals for me, while your flow is perfect throughout the entire piece, it doesn't falter once. i thought this was both original and unique in concept, while i adore the ending stanza, so powerful and hard hitting that it hits the reader like a slap in the face. beautifully written. |
I love this poem, the imagery you used was beautiful (and maybe a bit disturbing but thats thats what the poem called for and i liked it :). the flow and rhyme were also great. One small thing that you might be able to improve on is a couple of times you could have been a bit more creative with your rhyming but thats it, and overall I thought this was amazing. Especially the last stanza, it just made me stop and think for a second before going on and thats what you want a poem to do. Brilliant!! |
Wow... |
Well writtem, I particularily like the first and last verse. you express yourself well. I have read several of your poems, you are very good with words, Keep writing! |
by Lilly
Another amazing poem. Do you write professionally? It's a simple poem which just works well, you havn't tried to be clever or force it, your words just come naturally. I love reading all your poems, not one of them is unoriginal or boring. Each one has me wanting more at the end. You've inspired me. Thanks :-) xx |
by ashlee
This poem is very intense!!! |