Comments : Welcome To Slumber Land

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Pete..what can i say that would even begin to describe how i feel about this piece? i LOVE this. the imagery you portray in this piece is amazing, it created vivid visuals for me, while your flow is perfect throughout the entire piece, it doesn't falter once. i thought this was both original and unique in concept, while i adore the ending stanza, so powerful and hard hitting that it hits the reader like a slap in the face. beautifully written.

  • 16 years ago

    by Meet Me On Thames Street

    I love this poem, the imagery you used was beautiful (and maybe a bit disturbing but thats thats what the poem called for and i liked it :). the flow and rhyme were also great. One small thing that you might be able to improve on is a couple of times you could have been a bit more creative with your rhyming but thats it, and overall I thought this was amazing. Especially the last stanza, it just made me stop and think for a second before going on and thats what you want a poem to do. Brilliant!!

    -Nicole

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    This is so intense, filled with fantastic imagery in every stanza. You created great, dark atmosphere withing your descriptions of the nightmares. Very powerful poem.
    It has great flow from the beginning to the end, and your vocab is excellent.
    My favorite stanza is:

    - Fallen headfirst off tall buildings
    Drowned in freezing cold sea
    Been mugged, shot and stabbed
    Hung by the neck from a tree-
    ^^
    So intense and eery.

    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lucy Vandenberg

    Well writtem, I particularily like the first and last verse. you express yourself well. I have read several of your poems, you are very good with words, Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Lilly

    Another amazing poem. Do you write professionally? It's a simple poem which just works well, you havn't tried to be clever or force it, your words just come naturally. I love reading all your poems, not one of them is unoriginal or boring. Each one has me wanting more at the end. You've inspired me. Thanks :-) xx

  • 16 years ago

    by ashlee

    This poem is very intense!!!
    i like your poems they are all great!