by TrUtH hUrTs Dec 18, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
Sunlight reaches crookedly, |
by Kaila
I loved the mysteriousness in this poem it was wonderful and you truly did a good job with this one. The vacab was good but there were a few places that I thought the wrong word was used for example: first stanza line 5 the word would I think should be used but im not sure on what you were trying to say |
by Kalee
This is a wonderfully written poem. the wording was wonderful. the only little mistakes i could see were "but she coulcould cry" & "daddy�¢??s home" where you need to take out the "?¢??". other than that this is a wonderful poem. 5/5 |
by chind
Wow. |
by Sweet lig
Gosh!!! very touchy... its marvelous and fantastic!! 5/5 |
by kate
This peom was well spoken out i could picture it happening its really sad and very dark, i dont understand how someone could do that to their own child you know thats so messed up. :| i dont get it sometimes theres so many weirdos out there that like to do that and dont realized whats happening. but anyways amazing job. |