I have tried to follow your advice and find something I dislike about your poetry
Although I have been accused of being a romantic I consider myself a realist and can see no poetic value in glorify a pointless death from a lover's point of view. It seems from reading your poem we agree on this point

Omg, this poem is so sad. my baby comes home in a week. haha i guess i should have waited to read this one. anyways it was truly great. everything about it was amazing. Another 5/5.

Sadly moving, again perfectly flawless, you have done wonders with your work, this is truly the kind of poem that makes me want to cry, but it makes me think as well The flow was perfect, the emotion was strong, and deep, I loved this one the best out of the ones that I have read today, your talented and i think that your writting will take you far someday. Don't ever stop writting. 5/5

My, my.
My favorite one of yours so far.
It tells a story that is oh so real to many women today.

It was great and poetic.

Ok, like I said in a lot of your poems, the lines in the stanzas are too long. (But that's just my opinion.) Perhaps breaking it into shorter stanzas would help the overall structure as well as the flow of the poem.

For example:

She's standing at the window,
Tears pooling in her aqua colored eyes.
Choking back bitter sobs as she remembers Their heart wrenching goodbye.

Fingers pressed against the window pain, Face a deathly shade of white.
Her whole world crumbling down around her, Nothing will ever be alright.

Overall a great write from a great poet. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Sorry, my example is messed up...So here it is again:

Ok, like I said in a lot of your poems, the lines in the stanzas are too long. (But that's just my opinion.) Perhaps breaking it into shorter stanzas would help the overall structure as well as the flow of the poem.

For example:

She's standing at the window,
Tears pooling in her aqua colored eyes.
Choking back bitter sobs as she remembers
Their heart wrenching goodbye.

Fingers pressed against the window pain,
Face a deathly shade of white.
Her whole world crumbling down around her,
Nothing will ever be alright.

This was a very heart felt poem with alot of descriptions throughout it. The reader could really get wrapped up in this was nicely done Plot121