Ah, that was bloody good. Short and sweet. Keep writing, yeah?

This is very good for a ten year old; although it could use a little more depth. You have the rhyming scheme down packed, but you need to work on punctuation, capitalization and a few other things. There is one thing that I would like to point out to you right now. You should not have capitalized every word in your poem, but I still have to say the you did a good job. It was short and straight to the point. Why don't you take this poem and work on lengthening it, so that there is more meaning. Again I say good job.

Letty

I'm actually rather surprised that you are so young. I thought this was a really sad poem, and I think you chose your words nicely.